Monday, December 13, 2010

Command Economy

 
Onica Yu
Social Studies & English

Command Economy
Have you ever experienced living in a country where no rights are given? In some countries it is all about what the government wants and what they want to control. Command economy prevents individuals to have their own freedom and creativity.
First of all, human beings deserve to have their freedom, without freedom; life will basically be controlled by another person or anyone who has a lot of power. In the story “The Wise Old Woman,” old people are thought as useless by the lord, therefore they are being pressured to leave the village at the age of seventy-one. When the village is given tasks to do in order to not be conquered, the lord nor anyone else knows how to solve the problem. An old woman who has been hiding uses her knowledge to solve the solutions which save the village. Here the people learns that whether how old you are, you can still be useful in a way people do not realize. Freedom gives you the ability to state your opinion and to do what you desire. If the government in a command economy is the only one allowed to decide, opinions of individuals that may be right won’t ever be heard. However, not only freedom should be given more to people in command economies, but also creativity.
With the use of everyone’s creative ideas, countries can be strong and highly develop. North America is not a command economy because it listens to what people say and the government makes good uses out of it, turning them into one of the top market economies in the world. Unlike market economy, people in a command economy would not be able to earn their own profits, control their products, or be successful in their own ways. Everyone should have the rights to be successful in their own ways. Therefore, if the government has too much control, people may begin to protest just like in the Tiananmen Square massacre where 2,600 people died in 1989. Creativity and freedom are very limited in a command economy for the individuals. Therefore if it wasn’t, the command economies may possibly be more successful than they currently are because people can share ideas that might be useful for the government.
People in command economies should be capable to do anything just like how the government can. Freedom and creativity are the keys to strengthen developments. If they don’t start to exist in command economies for the people, mistakes will never be fixed or learned from. In conclusion, do you think countries with a command economy should start changing its living ways?

7 comments:

  1. I love your thesis.

    Your first analysis was good because you talked about the importance of freedom. However you could make it better by telling us more how does freedom help the people, the government and the country, in my opinion :)

    The 2nd analysis was really great because you expanded the importance of creativity and how it effects the government.

    I JUST LOVE YOUR LAST SENTENCE ♥
    GREAT JOB! :]

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  2. Hey Onica, your essay is really great. The evidence and analysis all connect to your thesis which is really good!

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  3. Sup :]
    i like your transition sentences
    because it took me a really to figure them out :)

    -Kristine

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  4. I really love your essay Onica.
    And mostly, i love most about how you ask a question at the end of the essay. It really makes people think a lot after reading your essay, it would make people think about what you said more.

    Way it go there! ;)

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  5. Nice essay Onica, I like how you end your essay with another question. I am wondering where is the quote from the first evidence, about the Wise Old Woman.

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  6. It's great Onica. I like your ending part, it's true anyways. Well done

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  7. The essay was great. I read it many times and in my opinion, i think that your evidence should include in your thesis to help the reader to understand the essay

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